Hello this is Emma from Karoro School. Wow this is very good descriptive writing. It made me remember when I had to do descriptive writing. Next time don't use so many and's. Also don't use hard so many times. Keep up the good work.
Malo e lelei Melemanu, I really liked how you told us about shrimps and mussels I had taste shrimps and mussels before but you have to try to do full stops. From hinemoa
Kia Ora Melemanu , I really like the way you have describe what Mussels and Shrimp looks like you used some descriptive words while describing it , keep up the good work Melemanu . Kind Regards , Lilly
kia Ora Melemanu my name is milz I like how u described the mussels and what they feel like.But next time use something else then and's maybe next time use full stops.
Hello this is Emma from Karoro School. Wow this is very good descriptive writing. It made me remember when I had to do descriptive writing. Next time don't use so many and's. Also don't use hard so many times. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteMalo e lelei Melemanu,
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you told us about shrimps and mussels I had taste shrimps and mussels before but you have to try to do full stops.
From hinemoa
Kia Ora Melemanu ,
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you have describe what Mussels and Shrimp looks like you used some descriptive words while describing it , keep up the good work Melemanu .
Kind Regards ,
Lilly
kia Ora Melemanu my name is milz
ReplyDeleteI like how u described the mussels and what they feel like.But next time use something else then and's maybe next time use full stops.
Ok next time i will do same more full stop.
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